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ode to intoxicants

Posted by doesthemagkdrgn on 2006.01.08 at 21:47

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crusty_mcboobs at 2006-01-14 02:18 (UTC) (Link)
hey everybody, sorry about my absence, i had a busy couple of weeks there.
brain hadn't quite recovered from new years before being socked with my
22nd birthday and then craploads of (paid) work. my creative output in
that time was ... zip.
ok, on to the poem. i think its pretty telling that u say you wrote it in
stages, and you mustve been on *different* substances because that's what
it sounds like, the 'romantic chemical' turning into something 'festering
and ugly'. or is this a kind of reflection on being pissed, that it can
start off with you floating and 'safe', and end up feeling scorned and a
bit tarnished?
anyway i think your revision would be a good idea, making it clear that the
'bugs' of love are being ignored, not your companion. but hey its a good
poem and its pretty impressive to be putting this stuff into lyrical form.
i shall post, i shall post soon!
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